I am a Los Angeles-based script consultant and story editor, and if you’ve landed here you are likely looking for feedback on a screenplay you’ve written. Or maybe you’re a director or production company and you’ve got a piece of material you are interested in developing.

Either way I’m here to help you develop your script. As a script consultant and story editor with over 20 years of experience working in all aspects of film and television, from development to distribution, and having read well over 2000 screenplays, my script analysis will ensure your script is entertaining, solidly structured and ultimately marketable.

My feedback, in the form of detailed written notes or one-on-one discussions, is designed to give you specific information about what works and what could use strengthening. I offer solutions and give suggestions so that you realize your vision and tell your story your way. I also give you tools you can use not just for your current draft but for every script you write, direct or produce.

So if you are staring at a blank page or have just read the 17th revision and are going in the direction of Charlie Kaufman in Adaptation:

“To begin… To begin… How to start? I’m hungry. I should get coffee. Coffee would help me think. Maybe I should write something first, then reward myself with coffee. Coffee and a muffin. Okay, so I need to establish the themes. Maybe a banana-nut. That’s a good muffin.”

I can help get you started, or back on track, and on your way to a well written, marketable screenplay.

Now Playing…

The accolades and achievements of all the writers and filmmakers I work with are becoming too numerous to keep track of let alone list. I’m so proud of everyone’s success and am thrilled to see how their hard work is paying off.

37 Seconds by Film Independent Fellow Hikari is sweeping awards notably at Berlin 2018 and Tribeca 2019.

Film Independent’s Global Media Makers fellows had two films play at the Toronto Film Festival 2018 – Ali Vatansever’s Saf and Nejib Belkadhi’s Regarde Moi (Look at Me). You can read about the 2018 GMM fellows here.

2018 Film Independent’s Project Involve short film Liberty by Faren Humes won awards in Berlin and SXSW, while 2017 Project Involve short film Emergency written by KD Davila won the Special Jury Prize at Sundance 2018 and the Narrative Shorts Jury Award at SXSW 2018. Huge congrats to both of these filmmaking teams!

2019 Film Independent Project Involve Fellows have spent the last 4 months developing their scripts and are currently shooting. Look for them on the festival circuit this fall and into 2020.

Past Highlights

On the script front Fawaz Al-Matrouk has received a SFFILM / Rainin Foundation Grant for his script MR. ROB. Congrats Fawaz!

Film Independent Global Media Makers Fellow Amr Salama’s film Sheik Jackson played to rave reviews at TIFF and was Egypt’s official best foreign language submission to the Oscars. It’s a beautiful, moving film and I look forward to US audiences being able to see it soon.

Previous fellows continue to have their films screen at festivals around the world. You can find a promo for Project Involve here. 2016’s They Charge for the Sun co-written by Eugene Ramos and Terence Nance played at the Oscar qualifying Palm Springs International Film Festival (among others) and Writer-Director Mary-Lyn Chambers’ Debris screened at The Short Corner and Diversity Corner at Cannes (2015) and has won awards at major film festivals including best narrative short at the Alliance for Women in Media Awards.

Vamonos co-written by Moira Morel and Erik Castrillon was a finalist in the 11th annual NBCUniversal Short Film contest and won an Imagen Award for Best Short (2015). While Writer/Director Lulu Wang’s Touch (2014) screened at the Asians on Film Festival where it won Best Drama and Best Supporting Actress. The film also screened as part of the NBCUniversal Short Film Festival where it scored a Best Actor award in addition to being nominated for Best Writer, Best Director and Best Short.

Filmmakers from the rock (aka St. John’s, Newfoundland) continue to make movies and win awards. Lamenting Pluto by Monica Walsh played at the Saint John’s International Women’s Film Festival along with 2018’s recipient of the RBC Michelle Jackson Award, Kerry Gamberg’s Crush. Latonia Hartery is this year’s winner and will screen her short Death in Winter at the 2019 festival.

Fellowships & Labs 

I was honored to return as story advisor for Film Independent’s 2019 Screenwriting Lab and thrilled to be back with the Directing Lab (read about the 2019 fellows here). I will be returning as an advisor for the fourth year of Film Independent’s Global Media Makers a cultural exchange program with filmmakers from the Middle East and this year we’ll also be working with filmmakers from South Asia. You can read more about this fabulous program and the 2018 filmmakers here.

I am returning to Whistler, BC for the fourth year as a mentor for the Praxis/Whistler Film Festival Screenwriters Lab. This is a wonderful program and it’s always wonderful to work with the writers and see their projects move forward. I will be back for the second phase, which is held during the festival in December. During the festival I also had the honor of working with the Aboriginal Filmmakers Fellowship Fellows.

In other adventures… I recently co-hosted Digicom’s third annual Filmmaking Symposium for over 400 students across the Palm Springs Unified School district. We screened short docs by Film Independent fellows and held Q&A’s with the filmmakers. The event was a huge success and you can read about the Symposium here. 

Classes & Workshops

I had the experience of a lifetime leading a workshop in Abu Dhabi as part of Film Independent’s Global Media Makers Program. I was truly honored to work with these filmmakers and can’t wait to see their films make it to the big screen.

I was thrilled to return to St. John’s to lead a full day workshop and 1:1 consultations as part of Scene and Heard for the St. John’s International Women’s Film Festival. Always love being on the rock and working with these talented writers – even if I didn’t see any icebergs!!

The Scriptwriters Network is a fabulous membership program that brings writers together for workshops, speakers, classes and networking. I recently lead a hands-on workshop called THE NEXT BIG THING: Finding Your Voice and Your Next Big Idea. 

STORY PREP WORKSHOP at Scriptfest 2017. If you follow me you know how important I think story prep is. So I was thrilled to have a chance to teach my story prep tools to writers at Scriptfest. This workshop covers what you need to do before  you start writing pages including how to break a story. I also recently taught this workshop at the Writers Store and on-line. To access my on-demand webinar click here. Want to get started? Read my blog post on Testing Your Story Concept here. I’m working on a book about Story Prep and Development so any and all feedback welcome!

PODCASTS! I recently talked to Max Timm at the International Screenwriters’ Association about theme, both what it is and how to weave it into your script. Check it out here.  Theme was the topic as well when I was a guest on Pilar Alessandra’s popular podcast On the Page. You can listen here.

SECONDARY CHARACTERS WEBINAR. My recent webinar on writing secondary characters for the Writers Store is available on demand and you can download it here  and find a blog post re-capping my webinar here.